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Oh geez a broken HTML tag. Only the "not" should be bolded in that paragraph.
Also, this line should be in italics:
"To any interested in learning the ancient and powerful art of the Dojikko-ken. I must inform you, this Art can only be learned by women. Men should look elsewhere."
Fixed. Are you sure that long part in the middle is supposed to be italicized?
It was meant to portray a flashback, but in hindsight perhaps linebreaks and context might be enough since it's large enough.
If its not a problem, removing them and just putting it between two *-* might work better. Though its not super urgent. (Never added to this before, didn't know that it couldn't be edited)
No, italics make perfect sense for a flashback. I just wasn't sure if it was a flashback.
My word. Not only did someone actually write a continuation for Lumitiel's "cute clumsiness" episode - something I'd been hoping would happen for years - it's also really good! Remarkable.
Admittedly, I briefly considered not reading any more of it after she lost to a random turd created for the express purpose of beating her. Homegirl loses enough as it is, you know? But it's a testament to just how good an episode this is that I kept reading anyway. I'm quite glad I did.
Lumitiel may have established the premise, but you got things going in splendid fashion. And of course the technique should be called "Dojikko-ken"! I'm kind of embarrassed for not having thought of that name already.
Are you thinking of adding anything further to this? I do hope so. Though even if you don't, thanks a lot for posting this great piece. Kudos.
Oh my, this is hilarious. I approve.
Actually, I think I'd like to make an addition to this. The only question is "what do people want to see"?
I was kind of thinking of getting to the chase. Maybe the day the Saotomes arrived, but that seems predictable. I'd like to know what people - especially the writer of this addition - would like to see happen next.