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DarkHereticMadman
Sun Oct 13 20:30:26 2013

Prolly a little too ditzy :) Anyhow, mainly set up the fate split to not fill her getting the rock with also making all these kinds of silly wishes while getting dressed.


tuatara
Sun Oct 13 21:13:32 2013

It was well done, though making so many changes at once means anyone else wanting to continue it has to commit to all those changes too. (I’m thinking of the one to Makoto in particular.)

Also, you had a minor glitch with Ami’s hair color: “The blue haired girl pouted, checking her phone a little.”

But it was still good on the whole.


DarkHereticMadman
Mon Oct 14 02:31:33 2013

Glad ye enjoyed it, Tua. And yeah, it's a bit scattershot, but nothing actually much extreme or that a followup author can't slip by for a bit by going to just talk with one or another. Nothing is particularly world changing in scope.

And oops on the blue/blonde mixup.


^_^
Mon Oct 14 03:05:26 2013

I liked the last wish where Ami made the rock into a peace of jewelry. Simple, but effective.