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Mr. Filler
Sun Sep 20 07:34:18 2020

Heyo!

Hope you like the slight change of pace with this introduction episode to the school. I wanted to write this episode for a number of reasons, mainly to not just have every episode have the same scene where Miss Peterson is giving some rant about what's wrong with the students. It probably was a bit too much telling rather than showing, but it did get to the action quicker outside in my opinion!

Also, reading this option, I felt kind of bad for what I wrote. A little... Trans-exclusive, you know? So I reworked the wordings so it will include all young women, plus some guys who might not even know!

Alright, thanks for reading and as for the future? I realized that Gene has some great set ups but hardly any of his options are developed! I'll probably go there next and pound some episodes out to make his thread a bit more robust!


Dissonant
Mon Sep 21 13:13:54 2020

This is my favorite of the options so far, great job! Loved the progression, and I agree that showing was more effective here!


Mr. Filler
Tue Sep 22 07:38:43 2020

Thanks for the comment Disso!

I know you and another author on this site really like Omni girls so it was a near requirement to fire this one out as soon as possible.

With that being said, I would love to know which option to follow up here if you have any ideas!



Fri Nov 6 23:26:23 2020

Really a fan of this, would like to see a continuation if the author has any interest, especially the second option.