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I like that, but there are a couple of things that are puzzling me:
"I can't be a schoolgirl without an assignment."
Why would Sharon say that? Surely schoolgirls in general manage without having an assignment?
"What I need from you is real simple -- on the face of it. Suppose you wanted to find out anything in the world, resolves any puzzle, any question. What would that be?"
How does that relate to Jim's situation with super-strong, teenage Sharon? If he wants help with that, then couldn't he be more direct? Or do you have another episode in the pipeline that will explain?
I was trying to honor the scene immediately before this, where Sharon is referring to Jim as "Mr. Reeves" -- whether this is meant to suggest he's a Jim Reeves, I have no idea, that's up to the previous author. It's a specific fantasy and Sharon was talking and acting in a specific way, so I figured some aspect of that fantasy would carry on. So I don't see that my choice was honestly so odd or bewildering. I suppose you're now taking "schoolgirl" as merely a synonym for "young girl" and now chucking the "Mr. Reeves" business and focusing exclusively on youth -- which is your right, but don't gaslight me that I went and threw in some bizarre condition out of the clear blue. The only thing I wonder at is that I wrote a suggestion from someone named Carson and but that never made it into the recorded episode, so the Carson option now makes no sense -- unless someone wants to give it their own meaning.
I confess I'd forgotten about the Mr. Reeves reference back in 2135, even though I reread the whole story. Sorry about that.
But that doesn't answer my second question, as far as I can see,.