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GMJ
Mon Apr 27 03:52:42 2020

I continue to enjoy this story. Marvellous writing, Churl!

I've noticed a few typos, though:

"Maggie fell into the pool, hitting her head on the side as she fell. Maggie cried out and jumped in after her." I suspect that second Maggie is supposed to be Min, but that makes the following sentence seem a bit weird, so I'm confused.
"To her borrow" was probably supposed to be "to her sorrow".

I wonder how much of Miguel needs to melt before he regains partial mobility? And if he were broken up and used as lavender ice cubes by a sadistic dean, would he have time to absorb her drink and add it to his mass before she drank it down?

This is a bit of tangent, but ever since Miguel exhibited the ability to absorb Becca's milk and add it to his mass, I've been expecting him to end up in the swimming pool, transforming all the water into more of his body. I doubt it'll happen while the Dean's around, though.


churl
Mon Apr 27 12:04:41 2020

Adams, could you please change the sentence to "Becca cried out and jumped in after her" and make the second correction that GMJ suggested

Thanks to you both!


Adama
Tue Apr 28 18:49:02 2020

Fixed.